Ashes to Ashes

Ashes! Ashes!
They all fall down.

— Unknown

The ashes fall lightly on me like dust.
I brush them off and they’re gone.

At this distance the fire’s still palpable.
The raging inside recedes.

I can watch as they try to flee.
I can watch as they try to live.

It didn’t have to be this way.
I didn’t want it to come to this.

But they wouldn’t leave me alone.
They wouldn’t let me be.

They’re bullies. They’re many.
They’re running out of time.

I don’t know how many will die.
No one knows.

Bodies count, ashes don’t.

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This week’s post is inspired in part by the YeahWrite prompt, from way-way back on July 5th.

It’s also inspired by the wasps loitering with intent somewhere near my front door.

© Indian Macgyver 2017

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23 thoughts on “Ashes to Ashes

      1. So kind, really! I too look forward to reading what you and the other yeahwrite participants conjure up this week. I’m looking forward to the microprose prompt hopefully I’ll get something in and on time this go round.

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  1. I like the rhythm in the stanza that starts “They’re bullies…” The two amphibrachs followed by the iambic tetrameter. It sped up my reading to the end. I did wonder about the ash/wasp metaphor the poem suggests. The poem might benefit from expanding on the similarities between the two objects.

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      1. An amphibrach is foot of poetic meter like iambic or trochee. It’s three syllables: unaccented, accented, unaccented. Such as in “they’re BULL-ies”

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  2. I love the wasp postscript, as well. Without it, this is a dark piece. With it, it’s almost comical. I enjoyed both readings of it. Well done.

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